Kamis, 26 Mei 2011

Unpredictable Love

Love and friendship are two things that always exists in people’s life all over the world. Every people have their love story whether sad ending story or happy ending story. Life with love as beautiful as a rainbow, but if life without love like vegetables without salt. It means that live without love would make the life sense nothing. That love story happened in Joe’s live. Joe was a student of Senior High School in third grade. Joe had two true friends named Patrick and Jessica, they were always as loyal as an apostle with Joe whether in happy or in trouble. Joe is a quiet calm person and also humorist. He liked to play jokes. Patrick was friendly and spontaneous person. He was also a bookworm person. Wherever he went, he always brought books. Jessica was sexy girl, but her behavior was rather looks like a man. Sometimes, Jessica was like a bear with sore head. She had a bad-tempered.

The story began from their school. One day in their school hold the first day of orientation period for the new students. There was a female student come late, and a collision between Joe and the female student in the school gate happened because she was in hurry. “Perhaps, this is what the people call as a love in first meeting,” Joe’s mind. They were fell down and saw each other. Joe felt a sensation of pulse beat in his heart when he saw the beautiful eyes of the female student. After a few seconds, they aware and the female student ran to the place where the other new students were assemble. Joe felt anxious to find out more about the girl.

After a few days, Joe knew that the female student’s name is Angellina. She came from other place. There, she rented a boarding house with her friend. The boarding house located beside Joe’s house. Angellina was still single, the most thing that made Joe very happy. The only thing in Joe’s mind was how to be her boyfriend. Joe then asked suggestions to his friends, Patrick and Jessica. “Jess, do you have any idea how can I get close to Angellina?” Joe asked. “I don’t know, I also have many problems, think it by yourself,” answered Jessica cynically. “Just get closer, why are you so fool to think about that,” answered Patrick spontaneously. “You are really right Patrick,” said Joe.

The orientation period for the new students was finished, Joe started try to get close to Angellina. At that time, Joe saw Angellina eats alone in the school canteen. Joe asked to Angellina a permission to seat beside her. Angellina pleased Joe to seat beside her. Because they didn’t acquaintance before, Joe lent his hand to Angellina. “We don’t know each other, what is your name?” asked Joe. “My name is Angellina, what about you?” Angellina replied. “My name is Joe, nice to meet you,” said Joe. “Nice to meet you too,” replied Angellina. “How smooth is her hand!” exclaimed Joe in his heart. Joe felt very happy because of the acquaintanced. After the acquaintanced, their relationship was getting closer. Because Joe’s house was in the direction of Angellina’s boarding house, they often walked together to the school. Every morning on school days, Joe often picked up Angellina. But, who knows after their relationship was getting closer, Jessica became rather different than usual to Joe. She was always keep away and pulled to other side when Joe asked something about Angellina. She more often walked with her other friends.

At lunch time in school canteen, Joe tried to ask Jessica about what was make her look different than usual. “Jess, why are you look so different, what’s wrong with me?” asked Joe. “Nothing,” Jessica replied without attention to Joe. “What do you mean nothing? Your face cannot lie to me, we know each other very well,” answered Joe. “I’m sorry, please don’t talk about this anymore, I want to play basketball,” Jessica answered and ran to the basketball field. Jessica then play basketball with her basketball team. She would join a basketball competition with her team as a representative of their school.

In other side, Joe’s relationship was getting more closer with Angellina. They often met only for speak or have a lunch in school canteen, but their relationship only as a friend. While they were having chat about them selves, Angellina often asked Joe about Patrick. That was make Joe a little bit jealous. But, Joe tried to answer the questions based on the truth and what he knew. Because of the closeness, Jessica was more keep away from Joe. He fell very suffer from a loss of his best friend. Joe’s friendship with Angellina almost reached few months, but Angellina never gave signals that she also like Joe. That was the reason why Joe decide only to be her best friend.

The time passed by. The day of the basketball competition was came. Jessica was ready for the competition. Joe, Patrick and Angellina came to watch Jessica’s played. Jessica played very well. The audiences was struck with amazement because of Jessica’s good played. Finally, Jessica’s team won the competition. The audiences gave them applause. Joe came closer to Jessica and congratulated for her successful.

One morning in school, Joe heard from Patrick that Jessica change her style became a feminine girl. Joe became very anxious to see how was Jessica with her new change. Then, Joe saw Jessica walk to the library crowded with many boys. What Patrick said to Joe is true that Jessica was change become a beautiful girl. Joe felt confuse of his feeling, mix between surprised with Jessica’s change and his feeling that he didn’t like Jessica crowded of boys. Joe came closer to Jessica and greet her. “Hi Jessica, how are you? Long time never walk together,” greeted Joe. “I’m fine,” Jessica replied. “Are you OK change yourself to be a feminine girl?” mocked Joe. “Do you think that only Angellina can do this thing? You are wrong, I also can be a beautiful girl,” replied Jessica. “Why are you say like that?” Joe flatter. “What do you mean say like that? By the way, isn’t Angellina angry if she know that you speak to me?” asked Jessica. “Why should she angry, we don’t have any special relation,” Joe replied. They were enjoy their conversation.

After that short conversation, the relation between Joe and Jessica was getting better than before. Didn’t know why Joe was felt in love with Jessica because of Jessica’s change. A few days later, Joe told what he felt to Jessica with bravery. Jessica accepted Joe to be her boyfriend. She said that she love him from a long time before. The changed that she does is to attract Joe. They started to begin a new relation as a couple lover. Unbelievable, Angellina was felt in love with Patrick, that was why Angellina often ask something about Patrick to Joe. They was also start a relation as a couple lover. Both of the couples lived happily ever after.


By:
I Gede Tawa Utara Jaya
(1012021036)
2 B

26 komentar:

  1. I think your story is nice. You had explained the figures very well.
    You also put some new vocabularies from our assignments..
    Nice bro..

    BalasHapus
  2. your story is very intresting. from this story we can know about the reality in the teenager's love story. same like andriyani's comment you also put some new vocabularies.

    BalasHapus
  3. i agree with Yeni and Edy your story is about our reality as teenager and you had explained the characters very well but you can add another conflict to make your story more interesting..

    BalasHapus
  4. Your story is very interesting. According to the title, ‘Unpredictable Love’, I predicted Joe is a gay and would make a relationship with Patrick. But in the end, I totally wrong. Hahahaha…
    Actually, I am very anxious why Angelina fell in love with Patrick although both of them never speak to each other. In my opinion, you might add some reasons why Angelina was fell in love with Patrick, so it would make your story more interesting.
    I think that’s all from me. Thank you for the story dude. Bye…

    BalasHapus
  5. Your story is good. You described the characters very well. But, I don't know exactly why Joe could fall in love with Jessica...he
    That's all...thanks

    BalasHapus
  6. actually your story is good....the theme also very interesting....but you need to check the tense in every sentence clearly....greAt job.

    BalasHapus
  7. yea..your story is unpredictable..i love Jessica character..she never gave up to get Joe's love..your story is happy ending..i love it..

    BalasHapus
  8. Tawa, your story is a good story. But it would be great if you add some idioms or Proverbs in the story. After all, your story is very good.

    BalasHapus
  9. Tawa, I would like to say that your story is perfect, but I can't say that because there are some mistakes in your story, such as the verb and what Yebbi said about the tense and must check your sentence clearly. I also agree with Gung De's comment. Thank you Tawa

    BalasHapus
  10. i like your story,but you must check your sentence,forza

    BalasHapus
  11. love is really unpredictable....
    i like to read it. but i agree with gungde's comment, it will be better if you use some idioms or other...

    BalasHapus
  12. Nice story… I never think that the ending of your story will be like that, I think Angelina and Joe will have a relationship, but it is wrong… Actually, I like your way to tell us about the characters in your story. Nice love story.. I like it… :)

    BalasHapus
  13. don't you fulfill the story with some proverbs?
    please check your sentence and one or three sentence make me confused. but, over all, i like it :3

    BalasHapus
  14. A good story. Your story is like a comic, Tawa. Kekeke… I this story is usually happen in our life, it make the story easy to read. But you must more careful in made a sentence. In the sentence “Joe asked to Angellina a permission to seat beside her.” it’s better if you write “Joe asked permission to Angellina to seat beside her.” It makes easier to read. And the ending, I thing you better make the ending more surprising. The beginning was so nice, but the ending is too flat. But the story is quite good. :D
    Thanks.

    BalasHapus
  15. wow, I can't imagine that Tawa, quiet student can makes love story. Nice posting...

    BalasHapus
  16. don't judge the cover fitriia,
    tawa is the best and smart too....hehe

    good job brota...

    BalasHapus
  17. nice!same with fitri, I never think that you will make a love story, but you did it well. :) like the endin of this story, but you need to tell it in detail. like why Joe fallin in love with Jessica?

    BalasHapus
  18. There are two things that I want to share. First, all of the people have the secret that keep in the bottom of their heart. Second, love is the greatest grace from God for everyone. I think, you combined both of these ideas and have written the great romantic story. Same with Joe and Jessica’s story, sometimes, we don’t aware that our love is near with us.
    I believe if you tell the conflict more clearly, like what our friends said, your story will be more interesting. But, overall, I like it very much. Good job, brother! 

    BalasHapus
  19. heemm,,, tawa i like your story,,but i have one question for you
    why did you choose love as the title of your story???
    i'm curious about it he he he

    BalasHapus
  20. tawa,, i never imagine that you could make great story like that,,,
    you are introvert student but you have a great skill in making a good story,,,
    wooww
    i like your grammar...

    BalasHapus
  21. This story is interesting. I think your story is nice. Actually, this story tells about unpredictable love. I like the ending story, you make two couples. I have question for you. Is this story is your experience about your unpredictable love? Hehehe... 
    F_3123_LA

    BalasHapus
  22. Wow, a nice love story, I don’t expected that you can create such love story. Good job Tawa! I like your story, but I think it’s better if you give a little bit conflicts there, so then your story is not too flat. You should be careful with the arrangement of your sentences and in using an appropriate to be.

    BalasHapus
  23. check your tenses again.... maybe you can revise it .... that's it... thank's...

    BalasHapus
  24. i think your story is very intresting. it is about reality. I believe if you tell the conflict more clearly it will be more interesting.

    BalasHapus
  25. GOOD story boys, your story is very interesting ,i like your story,,

    BalasHapus
  26. i think your story is about our reality as teenager. very well and very interesting :)
    good job tawa :)

    "agunk diiach

    BalasHapus